Score: 4

"[new review]"

submission: [S] Metal Digga

date: October 17, 2009

I understand you've probably not been playing guitar for too long, I only say that because of the lack of dynamics and fluidity in your playing.

But, first off, your tone needs some serious work, your sound is much more bluesy than metal. First thing you need to work on is getting some more gain in there to take up some of that space that you leave hangin' around.

Second, some reverb and delay and just a touch of chorus would really help out your solo's tone. A hall reverb at 3.6ms and a delay at 400ms would do you a lot of good and the little bit of chorus will really tie your notes together.

Third, your rhythm guitar needs some serious work. It's boring, it's the same thing over and over and over, when you came in with the tremolo picking it wasn't bad but you still had the same two notes over and over.

You solo really isn't bad, but you have too many rests and in a few spots you went sharp or you went flat and it really hurt you. I think what's really hurting you is the rhythm guitar, it's just too bland and boring.

If you were a bit more specific with your rig I could give you a lot more help.
What kind of amp are you using? Any pedals? What kind of guitar? What kind of pickups? How do you record? Etcetera.

It's really not horrible, you just need some work with your tone and structure.

Score: 9

"I reviewed the old version,"

submission: Fall

date: September 27, 2009

And now I believe the new one deserves some attention as well. (:

As I mentioned in the other one, the lyrics need work. But that can be excused since A: You're in the pop genre, and B: With your musical talent you don't need to be a great lyricist.

Everything about this new version is much higher quality and that's great, however your voice is just a tad below some of the instruments. If you listen to radio pop, the vocals soar above the rest of the mix and actually act as another instrument.

Now, I know you probably won't want to record another version. But just for fun (I hope I don't insult you by doing this) I'm gonna rewrite the lyrics so they're not so repetitive.
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Every mother, every father, every daughter and son,
We all fall once, before sinking yet again.
Everybody who loves somebody, everyone falls hard
Like every little rain drop.

Every shooting star falls somewhere
Before a wish comes true.
Every shooting star falls somewhere,
A shooting star just like you.

When you feel the weightlessness of falling down,
Don't give up, just turn around.
Look upon the faces of friends and take their hands.
With all the strength inside you, there's no doubt you'll make it to the end.

If you find a shooting star, please show it to me.
All I ever wanted was to believe.
That anybody can help somebody,
And somebody can help me.
When the sun falls down on the horizon,
That's when the moon appears, and everything glows.
If the rain didn't fall,
The plants would never grow.
And if the sun didn't fall,
The moon would never show.

So if you find that shooting star,
Let me know where you are.
I just want to believe it's true,
Cause I already believe in you.

Minor changes, but it would help with how repetitive it can get at times. It might interfere with how you've written it, sorry.

Great song though, honestly. (:

Score: 10

"Man..."

submission: NRS-Metaljonus

date: September 26, 2009

You're composition abilities are ridiculous.. Everything you touch musically turns to gold.. I might be able to keep up with you on guitar if you don't sweep, but as far as writing out music and getting all creative and shit. I'm screwed.

What the hell is the secret to your tracks?!

Damn you!

This is such a bad ass track, got the haunting Egyptian style shit in the beginning followed by dissonance and then you stay true to the Metaljonus name by going on a total shred fest. There is so much LTE and Dream Theater in your tone in some parts though it's hilarious, it's like you brought Petrucci over to your place and he just sat and jammed with you.

Fucking brutal man!
\m/

Score: 10

"You know Jon,"

submission: Orion(Cover)-Metaljonus

date: September 5, 2009

Any other person and I would have told them that this song was one of those songs that should never be played around with. This is Metallica's second best, in my opinion, instrumental they have ever pulled together in their career. The first for me is "To Live is to Die." There's just something about it that I can't help but love; maybe that it was written for the greatest metal bassist that ever lived?

Now to actually review the song,

The drums in the intro could have been brought it a little slower, but it's alright, not a big deal. The meat of the song; That first bit of riffage that comes in and makes the song what it is was done immaculately, absolutely perfect. The tone was outstanding, the drums were beautiful, the bass, everything was just awesome.

You know, I can't even finish reviewing now.

Mind = Blown.

That's all I've got to say Jon. When that main solo kicked in, and I heard all the little bits and pieces where you added your own life to it. I was just, "I can not review anymore..."

10/10

Perfect in every sense of the word.

Score: 7

"Very good!"

submission: _Theme Orchestration 2009_

date: August 4, 2009

But I wish like hell I had recording equipment so I could get you a real guitar in there. ):

It was honestly very good though! (:

Score: 10

"SO RANDOM!"

submission: Cet Air

date: April 9, 2009

Sounded extremely playful and happy during the first minute. Then it got a bit ominous, and a lot more organized.

Overall, it's not a bad song at all! Your bass is a bit muddy here and there but it's not bad.

I wish I could leave a better review but I'm about to go to sleep. O.O

Great job Alt!
5/5

Score: 10

"YEAH!"

submission: Silent Tears [Orch]

date: April 1, 2009

I WAS THERE FOR THE ORIGINAL AND THE ORCHESTRAL!
YEAH!
I HELPED HIM GET TOP 5, YEAH!
YEAH! GO ASIANS!

You know I thought you deserved the top. I had your back buddy! (:

Score: 10

"2.64-3.23 (+.58)"

submission: Twilight Interlude II

date: March 28, 2009

This is very good!

I'm not really sure what to say, I love it!

I found it on the Feeling of Music page. And was instantly impressed, but when that lead came in I couldn't help but vote 5 and let you know I loved this.

Coming from a guitarist, I see great things for you if you can get noticed. (:

Keep up the great work!

Score: 10

"Wow!"

submission: Aren't You Clever? (H R-Mix)

date: March 23, 2009

Very, very good!

When that lead kicked in I was actually surprised, I didn't expect it to speed up and become what it did.

It turned into kind of an emotional song, if you want to put it that way.

Very good "improv", I want to hear what you can do with effort!

5/5!

Score: 9

"not bad"

submission: Dance! Eins Und Rave!

date: March 4, 2009

i would love to hear a full length version.

but why does it say One and Rave?
that doesnt even make sense lol :P

again, not bad!
sounds great on my surround sound!